☆★☆ The Gossipion First Story Contest - Review Thread ☆★☆
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SmartyboyAkash
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11-05-2017, 01:45 PM -
#11
Review : wo bhayanak raat by bittu_boss
Well shuru se hee is kahani ne apni aur kheech liya kafi intresting lagi kahani..
Koi bhi aisi jagah nahi thi jahan kahani se dhyan bhatka ho.thrilling bhu kafi mazedar dikhai..
Shuru se laga raha tha ki ye zinda h aur apni kahani bta raha but end m sab kuch hee change kar diya aur vo mara hua nikla...
Thrill to acha dikhaya hai but thoda aur dikha sakte koi nhi achi story likhi hai...
Rated 6/10
All the best for the contest
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11-05-2017, 05:08 PM -
#12
Review : Dosti pyar sab bekaar
Well ab kya kahun is kahani ke barey m boht badiya kahani likhi h apne...
Boht hee bdiya plot liya h jo reality m hota h wahi dikhaya h ye nhi keh raha hu ki har koi aisa hota h but in some cases it will be...
Ek baat sach h ki insan pyar m kuch bhi kar jata hai kisi bhi had se gujarne ko taiyar rehta..
Sam ne sirf Maha ko pane k liye apne hee dost se gaddari kar di jiske sath bachpan se raha vo...
Aur maha jise sirf sohirat se pyar tha jiske liye insan k pyar ki koi value nhi thi...
Lekin akhir m wahi hua jo hota h...
Boht hee bdiya likha aapne
Rating 9/10
All the best for the contest
SmartyboyAkash
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11-05-2017, 07:08 PM -
#13
Review : पश्चाताप by vishu
Shuru m padte waqt story kafi intresting lagi..but lekin end m maza nhi aaya...
Plot acha liya aapne but sirf itni choti kyu likhi kahani last m pura change hee kar diya shuru m laga tha ki priyanka zinda hogi but last m pta chala ki vo mar chuki jiska murder uske hee pati satyam ne kiya..
But story bht choti hai jis wajah se kahani us tarah se achi nahi ban payi jis tarah ho sakti thi...shayad ise aur badaya ja skta tha..
Hope all the best for the constest..
Rate 4/10
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11-12-2017, 01:03 PM -
#14
Review : Shukla tum sasur nahi ho. by smaryboyAkash
Ek dehati par masaledaar story (desi love type) likhi he. Comedy aur uski ek jhalak ke liye kiye safe jugaad dekhke maja aa gaya . Aur is desi bhasha ke kya kehne .
Par jab chidiya ne shadi ke baad ka khat bhejane to padhke Aisa laga jese isse accha to Shukla aur Shuklayan the .
Aur dusri bar jab padhi to ek aur tuta hua aashiq table pe join hua , aur wo gaana , “ tera gam mera gam ek jesa sanam ” hahhahahahaa mast tha.
8/10
Jeher se jyada Khatarnak hoti he Mohabbat
Sala  koi zara sa chakh le ...to vo mar mar ke jita he
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11-14-2017, 03:35 AM -
#15
Review for ankhoin ki baatein

pyar ek nasha he ye nasha kab chute kisiko pata nahi

kab jaan ban jaye kisiko pata nahi

bas itna kahunga apke story ke bareme isko thoda aur bada sake tho aur behtar raja g

story me ek kashish he bas itna lag rha tha ruke na aur hota tho aur badiya banta
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11-14-2017, 03:38 AM -
#16
Review for wo bhayanak raat

baap rey baap ye thoda bhayanak he

apne thoda mehnat kiya he bittu boss sochan padta he jab ladka ek bhooth se bhagta he baki aurate bhi bhoot hi hote he

wse bhayanak raate ese hi hte he darwne

all the best for future writings aap horror bahut acha likte ho aage bhi apse ache stories ki ummid he
Bad boy
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11-14-2017, 03:41 AM -
#17
Review for pyar dosti sab bekar


durrani ji aapne bahut sare bhwnaye dali he isme

kya pyar ek dhoka he chalawa he

pyar dil se aana chahiye dimag se nahi

pyar ek tarah ka moh he iske andhepan me dosti bhi pet dikadeti he ye khna chah rhe the


me iska jyada kuch bhi keh nahi sakta isme sach bhi he juth bhi he
Bad boy
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11-14-2017, 03:46 AM -
#18
Review for teri yaad sath hai :

pta nahi ye pyar bahut logon ko jine ka sahara deta he kuch logon ko thod deti he

pyar dil se paida hoti hi wo sapne puri jindagi apne mashuka ke sath jine ki raah dkte he

apki story me bahut hi shiddat he

aap aage bhi achi kahaniya likhiye Smile

apka poem me bahut dard he pyar he Claps
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11-14-2017, 03:52 AM -
#19
review for pyare rishte :

aaj kal ke jamane me log shaadi ke bahut against hone lage he

reasons he bahut but log ye bhool rahe he ek sathiya hi hogi jo unki sath degi marte dum tak

aajkal bas shaadi ek tamsha ban gaya he

ek sache humsafar ko dundne me log saalo saal intejar kar rhe he alag alag soch he unki

rishto ko apnau aur unko aage badhau ye apne sach kaha he LOVEISPAIN ji

aap rishto ko mahanta sabko samjhaya he aap rishton ko apnauge tho rishte bhi apko apneynge Claps bahut hi achi baat kaha he apne
Bad boy
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11-14-2017, 04:21 AM -
#20
Review for pashchatap :

ye kahani pyar se shuru hua pyar pe khatam lekin satyam ko kya hua ye reason bhi janna banta he

aap iska reason mention nhi kiya

and vishu ji aap ne story likha he plot shaandar he but bandhe rakhne wali elements missing he

ye plot ko aap bahut hi acha plot bana sakti ho Smile

asha he ki apki ye plot story section me dkhne ko milega

satyam ko esa kya hua kyu badal gaya jo apni jaan par hi hath uthane laga


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